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The Morn I No Longer Will See - The Storyline

by Danielle-Rise


Fantasy #10025 published in English  |  Rate Storyline Rate this Idea »  |  Rate Storyline Comment - Review this Storyline »

It is 1807 and the world is going through an unknown event. Millions of healthy and unhealthy people are dying at frightning rates and millions more are being born at the same time. Though it might seem that it should balance out, it does not.

Christopher and his team set out to find the cause, coming to an unexpected island and the natives on it. The Bonitwa, the natives of the island, say how they know the cause. In fact, they say that the cause of the strange occurances is becasue the world is in the middle of a war between "Lady Death" and the "Man of Life." After detailed explanation of the supposed war between "Death and Life," Christopher and his team shunned the island and the natives for giving them stories of their lands instead of answers.

But once they reached Thailand, they come across an unexpected visitor, or formaly known as Man of Life himself. The truth reveals itself the more Christopher knows Life and more tragic events occur. Will the war be resolved and will any good come from it?

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Intriguing idea

February 6, 7:22 pm

I like the basic idea. Of course details need to be filled in and the rest of the story fleshed out, but I like the whole premise. Even reading only that little bit makes me want to know what's going on and why and how it will turn out. Good hook.

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Too Vague

February 6, 1:17 am

There is not enough concrete detail in this storyline. To me it sounds too much like a reiteration of the ever popular war of good versus evil, except without any flesh and blood characters on either side. You don't do enough to explain why the natural balance of death and life is interrupted. You need more explanation for why things are happening, not vague folklore. Folklore has its place but it can't carry a whole storyline by itself.

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February 4, 11:26 pm

The reason the story is rated for adult supervised is due to violence, blood, gore, sexual content, and explicet language.

If it is possible, I would love critiques and suggestions to the story. :)

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Danielle-Rise
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